Since so many of you requested more, I give you a continuation from last week’s scene. There is, of course, some action packed dialog that I left out (way more than six sentences, lol) so I leave you with this.
(I feel like there should be a voice over with “and now the continuation of Hells Kitchen”)
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Daman’s eyes popped open wide as he gurgled and gasped for a breath that would not come. His hands reached for his neck seeking the wound but could not find it. His eyes flittered to the center just before rolling behind heavy lids. Daman fell dead to the floor.
Marek sniffed and wiped a bit of splatter from his cheek with his sleeve. Pushing the chair from beneath him with his legs, he left the shack as silently as he had entered it.
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Whoa……intense and kinda scary
Yes, this scene is quite disturbing, actually. Murder always is. Thanks for your comment!
Very powerful 6 Melissa- love the scene and how you compared his departure to his entrance
Thank you!!!
Very good Melissa. I love the intensity.
Did he chop his head off??? Wowza!
He actually stabbed a dagger through his neck, but does it really make a difference? lol! Thanks for reading, Krystal!
What an exciting snippet, and Daman’s fear and panic comes through nicely.
…especially since Daman knew it was coming. *shiver*
Oh, wow. Nice six.
oh my…very intense. nicely done
Liz
Ewwww! (And I mean that in a good way.)
best compliment!!! (lol) Thanks!!!
Intense! Well done! Great six!
Marek is awesome. I can’t WAIT for everyone to see the rest of this story … in its entirety! Next to a great cover. Yeah, that. ;c)
Definitely a great cover. Can’t wait!
Great Six…definitely want more!
So fascinated with (and a lil scared of) this Marek character. Definitely want more.
I’m a bit partial to him myself. My son’s (15 months old) middle name is Marek. (is that weird?) Thanks for the comment!
OOh another cliffhanger…
Great six!
I love my cliffhangers! lol Thanks for the comment!
Intense cliffhanger six here
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Yep, love me some suspense….
Very creepy!
Badass scene! Terrific six. I like your style 🙂
I’m really a happy person… but my friends do question where the morbidity comes from some times… lol
Excellent level of tension in this. Well done.
My only note would be that repeating Daman’s name in the first paragraph really isn’t necessary. Nobody else is mentioned in it, and it’s a tad repetitive with it there. (Not that it makes a difference since it’s already published, lol, but just wanted to offer some advice to tighten it further.)
Thank you for picking up on that! Its actually NOT published yet… so I can fix it! WOOHOO!!!!!
Oooo. Who is Daman and did he deserve to die? I am really curious. Good visual picture. I liked it.
Ooh. Love the imagery!